Comments on: Shark Tank: Headline critique for a list-building script http://saleslettershark.com/2010/02/shark-tank-headline-critique-for-a-list-building-script/ Get Bit! Sun, 02 May 2010 11:53:05 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.2.1 By: Sales Letter Shark http://saleslettershark.com/2010/02/shark-tank-headline-critique-for-a-list-building-script/comment-page-1/#comment-7 Sales Letter Shark Mon, 01 Mar 2010 13:45:15 +0000 http://saleslettershark.com/?p=51#comment-7 You're very welcome, Jared! Glad to hear it was helpful. I look forward to seeing what the letter looks like after the rewrite. You’re very welcome, Jared! Glad to hear it was helpful. I look forward to seeing what the letter looks like after the rewrite.

]]> By: Jared http://saleslettershark.com/2010/02/shark-tank-headline-critique-for-a-list-building-script/comment-page-1/#comment-6 Jared Sun, 28 Feb 2010 16:44:10 +0000 http://saleslettershark.com/?p=51#comment-6 Awesome Becky, Thanks very much for this in-depth critique. The small change you suggested for the headline makes perfect sense, expert vs. competitor... it changes the entire perception. I'm taking your "alternative" advice, cutting out all the hype, just going for a straight forward "what it is" and "how it can benifit you" approach. I'm not a copywriter, and I don't play one on tv... lol... Thanks for the excellent advice/critique, this helps me tremendously. Jared Awesome Becky, Thanks very much for this in-depth critique.

The small change you suggested for the headline makes perfect sense, expert vs. competitor… it changes the entire perception.

I’m taking your “alternative” advice, cutting out all the hype, just going for a straight forward “what it is” and “how it can benifit you” approach.

I’m not a copywriter, and I don’t play one on tv… lol… Thanks for the excellent advice/critique, this helps me tremendously.

Jared

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